Griffinkeeper

Disclaimer: I'm kind of new to poetry; so perhaps I'm reading it wrong. That said, maybe you want your poetry to be accessible? One thing that gave me trouble immediately ...

This isn't actually a paradox. A paradox is a self-contradicting bit of logic. For example: "Everything I write isn't true." The paradox here is that, if the statement is true, ...

I personally find this article insightful and will be discussing it with other moderators. However, a review does seem in order. (Keep in mind as you read this that I ...

Why is this science fiction? It seems like this scene could be applied to just about any period of time. In fact, if Warden had told him to reply "Speak ...

You know the expression, “Go to hell”? And how people say it out of anger or as a joke? How hell is considered a place that is horrible? This is ...

A couple of questions kept nagging at me. 1. Why is Nick being given ten seconds? Is it an attempt to learn some information from him? Or is it an ...

Hey spacesoldier. Let's start with the title. The Death The Of Zeus is really clunky and you probably intended it to be ''The Death of Zeus." This isn't good form ...

When I read the title, I immediately thought of this: Trains are exotic and have been rich settings for spy films, mysteries, and the occasional disney film. It also invokes ...

Congratulations on your latest submission. It is a good time to reflect on all you have learned. I must confess that I have fear for this particular poem because the ...

Hey Penguin, Some thoughts: waiting for the inevitable tug of one space invading another. This image doesn't make sense. Tug seems to be interfering with invading. Tug implies that things ...

Hello folks! I'm Griffinkeeper and I'll be reviewing this work today. On a cool autumn afternoon, Elizabeth reads on a park bench in the town of Vespertine, England. She’s deep ...

Hello! Here it is. Please tell me what you think of the story and characters thus far. If you see any punctuation and grammar mistakes - pls tell me. But ...

This is a very powerful piece of work. It isn't necessarily elegant, but raw like a nerve. This makes me hesitate to write a critique. I STILL don’t understand. You ...

This story is in serious need of editing. Unfortunately, I'm running low on time, but I can give you an understanding of what I mean by just taking care of ...

Hello and welcome to YWS! I was walking home and looked across the street to make sure there was a clearing to cross the road. This sentence is awkward and ...