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I also changed the ending. Better?

No I meant to capitalize he. Numbers above 20 can be written in numerical form. Thanks for the review, I'll fix the punctuation error.

Thanks. And it wasn't bad. It just could be better :)

Lol. It's okay. Yeah This poem is a narrative actually and it all took place from 2011-2012 to now. The main character of the poem is actually a real person. ...

Here's a hint: Make it shorter.

I extended the ending

I extended the ending. I hope it's better

Thanks. The odd number is the guy she likes. She just doesn't have his number anymore

Thank you. And Actually everything in this poem really happened. Is that you in your profile picture? I really appreciate this :)

Thank you. And Actually everything in this poem really happened. Is that you in your profile picture? I really appreciate this :)

Thanks Kev, you're the best. It means a lot to know I have people here on YWS so support me. Thanks for the review :)

Okay. Try splitting it into stanzas so that the phrase "Time and Time again" is at the beginning of each stanza. Does this help? And you're welcome

Thank you so much. This really means a lot to me :)

No it's not. And I completely see where you're coming from. Ben is a person who wants to hurt the main guy. Thank you for your review :)

Is this better? I made an edit.