Locked up

I'm not liking this poem. It's not your fault I don't like it, I just don't. There are hings that need to be fixed. For one thing, your rhymes are forced. You are rhyming just to rhyme. I can see this because you disrupt the rhythm of the poem just so you can rhyme. Many of the best poems don't rhyme. Some of my poems have made the home page, and most of the ones that did had great rhythm, but didn't rhyme. (I'm not bragging, just using an example). I'm not going to do all the stanzas, just the ones that need most work.

My heart was ripped out
thrown on the floor.
Without looking
I knew I didn't have it anymore.

The rhythm was great until the last line. I'll give you a hint for a really easy way (it doesn't always work though,) to see when you're disrupting rhythm. If there is one line in your stanza that is a lot longer than the others, the rhythm probably isn't consistent. So instead, try changing this stanza to
"My heart was ripped out,
And thrown on the floor.
I know without looking,
It's not whole anymore."

See? Much better. And it even rhymes. Okay. You get the basic idea. Poems are like songs. You should be able to recite the poem aloud and clap a steady consistent beat while you say it. That's rhythm. So good luck with this poem. I'm sorry I was harsh. I really loved the idea of this poem, and the ideas you illustrated. I just think it could have been written a bit better.

Interesting poem. I'll get to the poem itself in a moment, but a few things caught my eye first:

one that i'll never forget.

The capitalized 'I' could be intentional or an error. If the former, then it needs to be consistent with the rest of the piece; at the moment, it's the only uncapitalized 'I.'

abusing me~

Axe the tilde.

I screamed at you, I pleaded,
for you to let me go,

Your use of commas seems to vary a lot through this poem. In any case, it's generally pretty safe to not worry about placing commas at the end of a line even if placing one would be grammatically correct. The purpose of a comma is to denote a break in the sentence, and since a linebreak already does that, having a comma is a bit redundant.

However, the poem has commas in a lot of places where they just don't belong. In the quote above, none of the commas are correct. The first one, following "you," could be a poetic choice, and it fits alright. Technically, it should be a semi-colon, but punctuation rules are heavily relaxed in poetry.

The second comma, though, is unnecessary and breaks up an independent clause. The last one should be a period since the next line begins introducing something new.

Anyhow, on the poem itself, I like how you end it. The narrator has been abused and it'd be foolhardy to believe that all the scars could vanish, and your poem is stronger for acknowledging this.