Goldenheart

I'm going to read it very soon for school. If I finish it quicky, I'll try and give you an opinion. Goldie

I hate to be a stick in the mud, but I've got to ask that if you intend to personally attack each other, you do it someplace else. We're here ...

I loved it! The emotions were well communicated, the sadness. The rhythm I also liked, flowing, yet with a pattern to it. Very nice! Keep it up! Goldie

I'm sorry, Fishface, but I didn't understand any of it. Were you trying to make a point with similar sounding words? Goldie

Mad! 'Tis very good. I caught only a slight repeat, where you used the word 'success' in one sentence, and then again in the next one. No big deal, though, ...

Thanks, guys! I'm glad you liked it. Does anybody think it is too long? Or too hard to read? Is it confusing? I'm flattered that you'd like to see the ...

Hey, Mad! Where/when are you going to post more of Blacklake?

Hee hee! Yes, I believe that's right! I do wonder, though... did you mean 'pen' instead of 'pin'? Goldie

Incredibly vivid! The varying length of the lines, and certain phrases repeated, gives it so much more drive and punch. I like it very much! Keep it up! All the ...

'Tis NOT bad at all, in my opinion! You have summed up the depths of my surroundings and feelings in three lines! Goldie

You've a way of taking childhood memories and pulling them to the front of a reader's mind! Wonderful! Beautiful and descriptive! Keep it up! Goldie

Hey, thanks, guys! Thank you also, Sumi, for pointing out my grammar mistake. How embarassing! I'm glad you liked it. Goldie