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Hello, Flame here to review your work... First off, welcome to YWS! I joined relatively recently, but I've really enjoyed myself here, and I hope that you do, too! I'm ...

Flame here! Amazing work, once again. I can't wait to see how this all turns out! Just a few minor errors... When I began this, I was distracted by the ...

Flame here, as promised! I loved the beginning; it really grabbed the reader's attention. Just one small thing that a previous reviewer hadn't mentioned: You used "racing heart" twice in ...

Hey, I don't have much to say except that I'm lovin' it!!! I guess it would be pointless to repeat previous reviewers, so I'll just comment on paragraph size. To ...

Hey, Flame here with some quick thoughts! This is a lot packed in for a short story. I felt like you went into a lot of detail about the conflict ...

Flame here! Absolutely loved the poem, just a few nitpicks... Grammatical mistakes. Don't be too comma-happy! Here's a lesson for you: Never use a comma after the conjunction "but" in ...

GoldFlame here! I completely agree with previous reviewers; it was a powerful poem. I would just recommend fixing the line breaks, seems a bit random at times...and the occasionally misplaced ...

Hey, here for a brief review! First off, I was a little confused with why you repeated some of the text from your previous piece. I had to go and ...

Hey, Flame here with some quick thoughts! I confess that I didn't read through the whole thing (don't worry, I'll try to get back to it), but I love your ...

Awesome! I have to agree with Messenger about my favorite lines, and that it was a wonderfully quick piece. Additional compliments to your rhyming! Just a few small things... Was ...

GoldFlame here with some quick thoughts! I can't express how creative I thought this was! The part about Fiera climbing up the sentences to look at a question she'd asked ...

Flame here! Sorry that I didn't review this earlier! Same thoughts as last time--brilliant, side-splitting, and unique! I think you were better at varying your speaker's tags this time, too. ...

Really unique idea! Did you have a fun time writing it? I love the whole First, Second, and Third Worlder idea, and you were able to incorporate a fair bit ...

Hey, Goldflame here for a brief review! I didn't read previous chapters, but I loved your piece! Just a few small things... Grammatical mistakes. They were so minor that I ...

Hi, Goldflame here! My sister used to be obsessed with Naruto, but I haven't really got to know what it's about. So this review is going to be focused on ...