GoldFlame

Hey, Flame here! I realize that I'm looking at a revised work, so I'll try not to refer to previous reviews. I love what you've got here. The grammar doesn't ...

Whoa, what happened to Chapter 7? Have I missed something? I'm all over the place today :)... And I forgot to properly introduce myself! I'm GoldFlame, but I call myself ...

Hey, Flame here! I admit that I only skimmed this, as the sheer size of your paragraphs was a bit distracting. But I hope that I can offer a helpful ...

Hey, Flame here! I'll tell you right off, I'm more of a reviewer to focus on mechanical errors and fluency. This way, any errors are easier to fix, and I ...

Hey, Flame here! Right off, I could tell that writing comes naturally to you. You nailed basic grammar, the phrases merged and flowed coherently, and...wow, I have to compliment your ...

Hey, Flame here! Welcome to YWS :). Nice job. Your paragraphs were broken up well, your writing was fluent, and you've captured the reader's interest! Only a couple grammar mistakes ...

Hey, Flame here! Welcome to YWS :). First off, I was confused when I started this, as it clearly wasn't a short story. It's possible to get more essay-reviewers if ...

Flame here, as promised! CLIFFHANGER ENDING--why?!?!?! Well, you know the drill. I bite back endless streams of compliments, and I point out the few mistakes there are in chronological order. ...

Yes, Chapter Five is finally here (or it seems so)! Wow, my nitpicks are steadily decreasing in importance. You write so professionally and yet are nowhere near stiff. You've managed ...

Hey, Flame here! I love reviewing fantasy and sci-fi, and even more so, introductions and prologues, because they're bound to be exciting. And you didn't disappoint me! You grabbed my ...

Flame here! Also a Whovian. The show is becoming upsettingly popular :)! I want to say that I absolutely loved this, as I thought one of the saddest moments in ...

Hey, Flame here! That was amazing. Sorry that this is so short, but there's not much to criticize! Powerful ending, as Mollylouise mentioned, and beautiful flow. I was just unsure ...

Hey, Flame here to review! Wow, the ending was powerful. One of my English teachers once told me that a proper essay leaves the reader thinking after the last sentence, ...

I love this! It really got the message across. In addition, your writing was fluent, and I couldn't find any spelling grammatical mistakes. I'd just recommend going a bit deeper--adding ...

This was truly beautiful, and I'm sure that a lot of YWS writers can relate with you. So the only nitpicks I have are minor errors. A "that" between "find" ...