GoldFlame

Flame here on this fine review day... This was an enjoyable read. My eyes were glued to the screen the whole length of the piece. I also love it when ...

Flame here on this fine review day... My review is based solely off this chapter, as I haven't read the previous ones. Frees up room to take a look at ...

Flame here on this fine review day... I also have "Ican'tfinishabook" syndrome. In fact, it's my worst enemy. I'll scribble down three to four chapters, tops, and then move on, ...

Flame here on this fine review day... First off, gorgeous title. You immediately snared my interest :D. Second, I admire your writing style. Your alternation between active voice and passive ...

Sorry if this review is a bit late. I'm reviewing works from the past :D. This immediately snared my interest. Combat lesson? Children of Knight? Not to mention that I ...

Flame here! Three years late, but here nonetheless. I'm rather fond of your style. Your descriptions don't dominate, but they were elaborate enough to contribute a unique touch. The reader's ...

Flame here, as half-promised! So, this is your first post? Amazing. Always love a dragon story :D...except for Eragon . Eragon was just a blend of The Belgariad, Lord of ...

Well-done. You left me hungry for more! I'd go so far as to request this be the start of a novella. My only nitpicks concern grammar and spelling. The pacing ...

Excuse me, did you just say apologies in advance ? :P Advice of the day: never underestimate yourself. Grammar and spelling were spot-on. Your writing style also suits the theme--kind ...

Hey, Flame here! Welcome to YWS :D! Sorry for the vague review. This was a bit longer than I expected. And, as Cha stressed, your sentences follow the same rulebook. ...

Here as promised! Welcome to YWS! Repetition is usually something I'm against--which makes me a hypocrite, I suppose--but the repetition here really contributed to the meaning. I was on the ...

Flame here, as promised! First to review! Unless sneaks a submission in while I'm typing... You write extremely well for your age, and I can tell because I'm also thirteen ...

Flame here! Very well-written. You managed to craft a beautiful story in a twelve-line poem. I also admire your style--blunt and subtle at the same time. Punctuation, grammar, and spelling ...

Hey, Flame here! I love this. The emotion was so raw, pulled straight from the heart. The title also fit the theme well. I must say, the repetition really highlighted ...

Back again! I didn't know that you write poetry :D... So, as previous reviewers have indicated, this is a truly wonderful poem. And a truly wonderful title. Your repetition ties ...