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I like this, kind of sombre. Very good flow, only a few errors but they've already been corrected. Well done! I love this poem.

I like this. Very good flow, only a few errors but they've already been corrected. Well done! I love this poem.

Try to use punctuation with your stanzas, it gives the reader more of a feel how to read it. Also, correct your grammar (capitalization mostly). Other than that, great poem. ...

Very well done. I love the feel of it, how it flows. I'd like to read more poems like this. Very good.

Wow, I just love the metaphors! Keep it up, I'd love to read more from you.

This is good but I think you need to put it into verses. Since it is a long poem, you can make it feel shorter and more 'flowing' by using ...

Fantastic description. This is very good.

Ah, yes. Death. Quick, slow, unknown. Good poem but you might want to shorten up the last line a bit.

Beautiful. I love this. Your imagery is fantastic and I don't think there's anything I think I need to correct. Great work. :) P.S: I like moonflowers too.