GibsonGirl

HAHA I’m not a bloody poofter!” Poofy things..... that's a great word. I have an idea about a sequel...muahahaha!! Actually, I've got a few in mind. Jack Shepherd is Gay ...

After reading this, I don't know much about Reynolds. From what I've seen, he's an average rich guy with a couple kids. This might have been too short to really ...

The rhyming here gives this a singsong-y feeling, which isn't good, even in a song. I liked the first verse, but after that the constant rhyming got annoying. In the ...

In addition to what Pandora said, the chorus wasn't that great. where are you? you've gone too far away. Where are you? why can't you just stay? why are you ...

Some lines here are pretty good, but mostly there's nothing that hasn't already been said by countless other poets. I'm falling,falling into the dark I have seen this line so ...

I liked this a lot. Unlike Brad, I think the imagery worked very well. It described a breakup (I'm guessing) in a unique way. Down the street, I can see ...

This song was OK. Nothing really jumps out though, and I think that's a problem. Most of it is sort of cliche and a little hard to realate to. I ...

This is...okay. It defintley needs work, but the idea has potential. I agree with with Maggie, the constant rhyming reminds me of a musical. Just make it flow with the ...

This poem is okay. I can't really decide if I like it or not. You used some nice imagery, but the flow is what gets me. On one hand, I ...

First of all, it's never the readers fault if they don't get something out of a poem.It's the writers job to make their work mean something to people. Second, I ...

Sorry I don't have as much to say as others, but I don't have much experience with fiction. I like this a lot. It's creepy in the same way as ...

I agree with what other people have said here. It's good, there's really nothing for me to pick out other than the line where you say something about crying out ...

I agree, you should put more space between your paragraphs to make it easier on the eyes. The accent was a little weird, you could try to show it as ...

I like this, probably because it's easy to relate to. You might want to separate it into stanzas to make it easier to read. Also, I've lost who I am. ...

SlickJimmy, I don't really know what to say about this. Most of the rhyming is forced and none of it really makes sense. And if so not, then for shame ...