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This is a classic. Such a powerful book with a powerful message. The last paragraph is simply beautiful.

Yeah, I know what you mean. *buries head in hands* This will need yet more work.

The ending is much better now. Well done! (Have you edited this? Because I missed it the first time...) You still have some 'telling' sentences and some stanzas are still ...

Hey there, Already with just a little tweaking this is much better. You're still telling in places, but it's at an acceptable limit. You could do with expanding "I was ...

Yes: much better! I particularly liked your wry comment: " 'Coming to terms' is sickeningly untrue." You really have taken on board what everyone has said: you show now much ...

yeah... it's somehow messed up... will try and fix.

Thanks for your comments. How exactly could I improve the shape? Mesh it all into one stanza?

I love 'Birdsong'! Haven't read 'Human Traces' yet; is it worth considering?

Interesting interpretation; hadn't thought of that! Thank you!

Your poem was very touching. as a writer revewer it is fun to write and read bad reveiws. And since this was one of those supercalafragilisticexpialadocious poems, there cant be ...

It was meant to be about a British Chinese person arriving in Hong Kong on the eve of the Handover. As Gryphon rightly pointed out, the title refers to the ...

I will edit it. This isn't one of my best stories.

This is only the first part... more to follow! Thanks for reviewing and watch this space!

Thanks. Comments much appreciated. Will work on it.

If you know the film ending, you'll know the book ending. Having said that, the film lacks the subtlety and richness of the book. It's still really worth reading even ...