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This is much better than the remnants of the original version that remain in Snoink's review. You employed some good images: "The empty space beside me" and: "The single coat ...

Agreed, Brad. You have some good ideas Eimear but the problem is you don't set them into a dramatic framework. Dramatic poetry = events + emotion as in the 'Sticky'. ...

Yay! An epistolary novel! I love the concept, but the main problem is that you tell far too much rather than SHOW. You use several 'was/were' expressions, e.g.: "I decided ...

No, I like the spreading out, dear! I love the simplicity and quirkiness of it: so refreshing. It almost feels like a fairytale. (I should try and do something like ...

Agree Adna. I applaud Eimear for trying to show us something unusual and perhaps deliberately more mundane, but the odd image here and there could help us readers focus our ...

Hey Eimear, Small favour in return for reviewing several of my other poems! ;D First point: I don't agree with Suzanne and some of the others (much as they are ...

I'm with Eimear and Snoink on this one: you can give us as much emotion and feeling as you like, but in a DRAMATIC poem, you need to connect events ...

Yes, I agree with Josh here. Repetition can work but only up to a point. In my piece, "Lake", people found it effective because I changed it slightly at the ...

Hi there; welcome! This was a good first attempt at writing love poetry; I applaud you in that respect. You tried to put in some interesting imagery - "My gravestone ...

Yeah, I have to agree with the others here. The problem with the rhyme scheme, as those above have pointed out, is that it's too forced. As a consequence, it ...

Agreed, Krupp. You had some great ideas, Frangipani, but you didn't reveal their true power and meaning. This poem was too short. Had you fleshed it out and spent a ...

Hey there: this review arrives as requested! The last two sentences were definitely the best part. That section has a wonderful short, sharp quality to it; I love those kinds ...

As requested! You really broke ground in this poem: I must praise you for being so challenging. You used poetic devices to extremely good effect, such as the anaphora in ...

Yeah, punctuation could really give the reader a helping hand with this one. I get the lineation! It's a physical manifestation of time as the lines shorten to one word ...

Unfortunately, I didn't get it either. I read this expecting some powerful metapoetry, which is what you advertised this as. (Metapoetry is poetry about poetry.) Instead, all I got was ...