Gahks

Hey, I haven't seen an acrostic for a while, so well done for using a much neglected form. The main problem with this, I believe, is the poem lacks focus ...

I do agree with the others but I won't force anything down your throat - I'll try and be as constructive as I can. This is poetry written from the ...

Hey there: I would like to echo the sentiments of others who, like me, are sorry for you loss. I agree with chocoholic in that this piece would work better ...

Yeah, I'm with Azila on this one. I love short, brief poems like this and applaud the amount of emotion you managed to pack into a few lines. However, as ...

Hey there! I haven't reviewed stuff in a while so I thought I'd look at yours! There are some really great images in this: "the trees... dancing to the chirping ...

Wow. I haven't read any stuff around here in a while and I thought I could lend my help to this piece, which seems vacant of feedback. Many of the ...

Hey there, Some of this stuff is really great. You could make some improvements, however (as always! :) ) "But every time you drop my tea cup, my metaphor for ...

Hey there! This is great. However you could help it a bit by giving it a more readable structure. E.g.: "...your hand on my shoulder and my breathing too fast ...

I agree. Some of your imagery is wonderful, such as: "You were encased for 9 months like a mummy in a tomb." (Brilliant!) But elsewhere, your rhymes seem forced. The ...

Hey there! I don't think we've met before... I'm Gahks (that's pronounced 'garks'); pleased to meet you! You use a lot of passives in this poem; this is associated with ...

Hey there! Let's get reviewing... Good introduction in the first stanza. Your deliberate omission of capital letters set up our expectations nicely. Is stanza 2 really relevant? The "bones in ...

Hey there! Well, you have some very original ideas. However, there are (as always) a couple of things that we can easily iron out. Firstly, this poem was way too ...

Hey Eimear! Your images are wonderful in this poem and you have some really interesting ideas, but at the moment they seem like a list, as other reviewers have pointed ...

Hey Eimear! I liked the way you went back to the older phrasings with this. As you say, you took inspiration from another poem and obviously you wanted to recall ...

Hey Suzanne! This was excellent stuff and I praise your originality for showing us the ultimate act in a different light. I had not seen some of the double meanings ...