Gahks

A lot of people seem to like this poem, and I can see why, because it's full of zest and exuberance. What I find problematic with it is, firstly, its ...

Excellent work, Kylan. It's so refreshing to read a poem from this site every once in a while that touches you in a way that no other poem could. It's ...

Hi! Gahks here, and I'll be reviewing your poem today. :D For a start, I'd like to say well done for taking your first steps on the journey of writing ...

Hi there, this is Gahks here to review your poem! First Impressions: You maintain a lovely sense of loss throughout this poem, and the initial concept is well thought out. ...

This is a decent start, but there is bucketloads of potential here that you haven't fulfilled. You get the overall gist of the speaker's argument, but as other critics have ...

Hey there! First of all, I would like to thank you for taking those first baby steps towards writing great poetry! Remember that all famous writers were novices once, even ...

Hi there! Um, I'm with Mesh on this one. You reference Milton's epic narrative poem "Paradise Lost" in the title, yet you fail to follow this up with some kind ...

Note to the above reviewer: As stated in "What the Lyric Poetry Section is For," this area of the literature forums is not for song lyrics, but for lyric poetry ...

Hey there! My initial thoughts are that this has an interesting premise, taking as it does the point of view of a female soldier. However, you need to fully exploit ...

Hi! When I first looked at the whole poem, the italics jumped out at me! I recommend not using them, because they distract the reader from the essence of your ...

Ooh, this is a dark poem! On first glance, this is good. I love the way you've structured this - the varying line lengths perhaps show the frenzied movement of ...

Hi! On first impressions, this is quite a good effort. I understand that this must be a very personal piece to you so I'll try and be as diplomatic as ...

Agreed Fortuna. Some anti-poetry is written very well and subverts the genre very effectively (just take a look at Wilfred Owen's brutal war poetry), but the main difficulty that I ...

Hi! I agree with Suzanne. Whilst I applaud your originality with the form - if it was at all deliberate - it lacks meaning. All decisions we make as poets ...

Hey Changer! I'm with June on this one. This kind of poetry can be intensely personal, and I hugely appreciate the therapeutic value it can have, but it leaves the ...