Gadi.

So, what you've got here is a perfectly good poem...that "rambles". "Rambles" in the sense of the word that it talks about nothing. Why do I think so? First, you ...

Haha hilarious. "a tutu for your naked flesh"...genius. However, Snoink, there is a MAJOR, MAJOR problem. A problem that can only be solved with the help of... the metaphormeister! METAPHORMEISTER: ...

Well, I am Israeli, so of course I came onto this post with heightened senses and increased curiosity. I wasn't surprised much: just a few well-spoken propaganda words with no ...

Wow... A little bit on the unprofessional side, but still very enigmatic(ally arrogant). Full of Rocky Horror and bloodthirsty Guns & Roses, this truly rang of the "I Love Rock ...

I can't agree more with Colleen. The rhetorical ?'s must go, and the complete stream-of-conciousness style is too much. I liked some parts of it, though some other parts felt ...

A couple grammer mistakes: "My body you will burried, " "For what you're living for," Overall, this was good--as a normal lyric. I think you could do so much more ...

Very unexpected. This was delicious, like a feel-good indie movie in a very random week when you are struggling with the meaning of life in etc. etc. I like this. ...

This seems more like an experiment than a real, solid poem. The entire structure threw me off a little, though I generally liked the paced, chopped lines and wildly astounding ...

I liked it. Your description, it's so crisp, up to the point: "It curls with the air currents, flickering With the light flap of nonexistent wings, " Beautiful. Though the ...

Oh no! How can he break up with you! I feel so...sad! I am so incredibly sorry! To help: Dump this poem. It's madness. Or at least overhaul it and ...

Nice! I liked it. It was really simple. The specific line where I really felt the emotion, or more simply my favorite line, is like the slow and delicate samba ...

II. une tâche de montagne there is a mountain between what he conceives and all the capacity he has for becoming himself. like Alps-Maritime rising over cool, blue Mediterranean gulf— ...

[pre]Play House I. Le Petit Enfant Scientifique my little scientist on the floor, building blocks of color, something like Tetris; or, pricking the center of june- bugs and beetles: green ...

Good job BBB! This was a perfectly acceptable poem, BBB, and it's great that you scraped that previous critique. Basically, this is more like a simple, bland, bad prose scribble ...

So, Bobby--this is good, but compared to your usual work, this is completely blunt, overstated, and, I must agree, rambling. "crap poet" On first read, it's good, but it gets ...