Published April 13, 2008
I'm better than you...
I pretend to be good at writing
my music pretty much sucks
I never was good at school
never liked reading books
I can't really tell the difference
between wheat grains and rye
and my acting skills are honed
through always telling lies
My maths is ever daunting
usually too hard to chew
and the only science I like
is the science of faking flu
Then social is the art
of getting ahead at lunch
whilst history doesn't count
if it happened before brunch
I finish second-to-last
always miss the homing mat
and always hit my head
with my own cricket bat
Too weak to be a bully
too smooth to be a nerd
too smart to be special
too stupid to be heard
Too odd for fitting in
too scared to say I'm free
too bored to be anything
except what I can be
Too proud for me to hide
as you can clearly see
that I'm far better than you
at being just like me
(edited note: I need Serious help with rhythms! It's a bad habit of mine. If anyone has some pointers that can help me out, apart from reading aloud or tapping, pm me or leave a comment 
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I love this piece.
I think it's good..
The rythm is okay
It's not bad
I VERY much enjoyed it
Wow great poem, and I see no problem with the rhyming.
In this line...
Is there a reason for the 's' that I'm missing?
I also suggest some punctuation, although I can't really talk; not exactly one of my strong points.
I really like the way your rhymes don't sound forced, and the way I get a strong sense of character form this poem. And great title!
I like the tough yet down-to-earth tone of this poem, and the rhymes were well- done. Like Gadi said it reminded me of lyrics.
This part seemed pretty random and threw it off a bit:
[quote]I can't really tell the difference
between wheat grains and rye [/quote]
Otherwise, a good read. You actually make being mediocre seem pretty radical. XD
The rhymes weren't bad, and for a navel-gazing poem, this was surprisingly lacking in the irritating qualities of most of its mates. I actually enjoyed this a lot; parts of it were quite clever. The rhythms, however, were pretty dreadfully off at points. Read it aloud to figure out where you're messing up!
Wow... A little bit on the unprofessional side, but still very enigmatic(ally arrogant). Full of Rocky Horror and bloodthirsty Guns & Roses, this truly rang of the "I Love Rock and Roll" toughness. I loved it. The rhymes were superb.
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Hope to see more of you!
(Is this in the lyrcs section? I forgot to check