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Nice! Here are a few suggestions: the cold water making me a bit shivery It's always too cheesy to say something made someone ____--it's something a five-year old would say. ...

Nice! It was touching in its simple ways, but very solemn in the topics of a single mother. You've created a little To Kill A Mockingbird. It's excellent. But who ...

It's great! I will, however, make a few suggestions: What hurts is that you’d hold her, The same way you held me; That you’d whisper in her ear, Make her ...

It's good. I can't say I liked it, because the story itself is very wicked and sad. I can't imagine the terrible action of the story! I have several things ...

NICE! I liked it! It's incredibly intriguing and I can only say that what attracted me the most to this piece was my curiosity to see what will happen next ...

Nice! I liked it! Here are my comments and critique: I liked the first sentence. It was sort of philosophical, in a way--every end is a new beginning. You told ...

Wow! This prologue was certainly a jump. A few things: When you identify them by the color of their eyes, please use colors which are much easier to identify. You ...

The best part and the majorly beautiful effect of this peace is the rhyme and rhythm. It sounded really good. I read it out loud twice and could still hear ...

Nice! I loved the ending. It had a very sweet story/plotline, and told in a unique method. Here are my doubts: The character speak as if they are in a ...

Again, excellent. I just like your voice and the story itself is nicely done. But now I am already kind of tired. Is the sotry about her troubles with alcohol, ...

I can't understand how people found it boring! That was fantastic! It gave me the chills! I don't like fantasy much, so when i opened the forum for fantasy and ...

This poem seems SO sophisticated! Of course, violins are sophisticated, but this seems so mature and yet so light! I loved the idea of making love to your violin (not ...

It looks like you wrote it really fast. I agree with the others: it is prose, and the runover sentences are more like narrative poetry than actual fiction. It's good ...

I liked this. A lot. The imagery, the words, the lines, the structure--everything was perfect. It flowed, and the story itself could be translated into a poem. In fact, the ...

Certainly interesting, and very good. I like the beginning of the friendship. And it has a nice little, cute if I may say, plotline. However, the characters are sorta flat. ...