Nice! I loved the ending. It had a very sweet story/plotline, and told in a unique method. Here are my doubts:
The character speak as if they are in a fantasy story. "And now I must go." It makes them more flat and two dimensional than say, "I got to go now." It is less formal for such friends to speak and thus more believable.
Also, your voice is frustrating. It sounds as if he is reflecting on the meeting, even though the beginning is much more different and random.
Othewise, it was fascinating.
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