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Re: Why
Hey, there! Great job on this. I loved the first paragraph; the building details intrigued me to continue. I didn't see any blatant issues, so I'm just telling you some ...
Nov 16, 2013 -
Re: We were meant for winter
Hi there! Nice job- this is a beautiful and flowy (is that a word?) poem. A couple of slightly awkward lines: "I just notice, in time" I kept wishing that ...
Sep 5, 2013 -
Re: Guilty of Being innocent
Hello, Ariana! Nice poem, but it needs some work. I feel like in lines 1 and four, you started a thought that I assumed you would continue on in the ...
Aug 25, 2013 -
Re: When I Learned To Believe
Hello, shineuntiltomorro! I absolutely loved this poem. The only thing I did't like about it was the format. Until the last two lines, looks like it is written in paragraphs, ...
Aug 25, 2013 -
Re: infection
Hey there Persy! Future is here to review your work. Nice poem! The Bad: "your hands were clammy and small, withdrew from mine." The word "withdrew" doesn't work here, grammatically ...
Aug 25, 2013 -
Re: Raindrops
Hi there! Future here to review your work. Nice job on this piece- it's very original. There were a couple of grammatical errors here, though. First of all, in multiple ...
Aug 25, 2013 -
Re: Just Free.
Just reviewing the revised poem here: I really don't have anything negative to say about this poem. I liked your use of italics on certain words. I also loved how ...
Aug 21, 2013 -
Re: In the Mind of a Loon
Hi, fictionfanatic! Good work on this, but I have a few critiques. First of all, I'm pretty lost when it comes to the title. I just don't think it makes ...
Aug 21, 2013 -
Re: for my darling
This is really impressive and enthralling. I loved the beginning parts- I was very confused only in one part, which was in the eighth stanza. Maybe I'm just being stupid ...
Aug 9, 2013 -
Re: Like I'm Dying
This story was a pleasure to read. I really liked how you built the importance of the event- first it was just a nerve-wracking concert, then a concert at a ...
Aug 9, 2013 -
Re: The Adventures of Felix Van Doren: Zombies!
Very entertaining- I hope you continue the story. I could definitely see this on a screen, but the scene change here might be awkward onstage, although you might not be ...
Aug 9, 2013 -
Re: Ill Always Miss You
Hi, alliecat98! This is my first review, so I'm not sure if it will be any good, but here we go! I really enjoyed the story, however I did not ...
Aug 7, 2013
