well this is my first review i hope it helps though i'm not sure it will help. i really like this piece.
i love how it shows you the guilt and remouse she feels, for her sibblings deaths because she was driving the car. i also like the way you discribe her brother 'elvis too small and young to reach the and Elvis, too small and young to reach the third shelf on their pantry.' the only thing i really have to say is you should go back and look at were her best friend tells her 'trust me it's not you fault and they know that. they're somewhere looking down on you and they still love you' the line would probly go along better if it was in capitals so to make it seem like they are really trying to get the point a cross that her sibbling knew it wasn't her fault and that they are looking down on her. and i must say you have a really good title for you piece. though i have to wonder about the reason why you have it in verse.
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