Forestqueen808

It was really short, to be sure, but I liked it. It really wasn't too descriptive, but thats good. You don't want the reader to be overwhelmed with description. And ...

I really like the suspense you're building up. But I think that you could possibly have written the hook better too. Did you even really need a prolouge? Was it ...

How could you say that wasn't good? I liked it! It talked about the senses very well. I loved how it was descriptive, but not overly descripted. You know? It ...

Wow. I am sooo excited for the next chapter!!! Yay!!! It was really good. I'm so interested in the facebook thing and why all this happened. It's really awesome. One ...

I liked it. It really hit the spot for me. It was short but really good. I hope you keep on writing lyrics, because it was really good. I was ...

This was really interesting. I definetly didn't stray away and think about other things while reading this. I didn't notice any grammatical errors really, maybe one or two. I loved ...

I really liked this. It was interesting how you did Feel the Music. It just seemed different and I kinda liked it. I think you could have organized it into ...

It was really interesting. It kinda made me think about guys really CAN be picky. But girls can be picky as well. It was very interesting. I know I talk ...

Its a great storyline and I only saw a few grammatical errors. I'm really interested in the next parts. Its great build up and I'm really really excited. Maybe you ...

I really like it. I love how she's a ghost and like she's drawn to him. They don't seem exactly like the traditional ghosts either. I love how you can ...

So I don't quite get it. How did she not know Mitchie was dead? Did they always say she was traveling through Europe? I was kinda confused. So Java is ...

Wow. I really liked that. I'm all into screamo and heavy metal so it really appealed to me. If I could have changed anything, I think since we're all writers ...

It's definitely interesting and I really want to read more. I only saw a few grammatical errors that I saw. I would like to know more about the doctor and ...

That was really interesting. I'm excited for the next parts. Only a couple things. You kept doing this ." and then starting without a capital letter! You should put a ...

Was that supposed to be a short story? I personally would have liked it better if it had been like a novel. It would be interesting to learn more about ...