Flux

Wow! Fantastic review, thank you! This is really going to help me clean this story (and other stories) up so much! c:

Heya! Thanks so much for this fantastic review! It really helps me so much! c:

Thanks for the tip! I think I had it like that in order to create a sort of pause, but I think that people will just read it how they ...

Thanks Rose! I'll definitely take your nitpicks into account -- I'll just have to play around with it in order to get that "flow" that you mentioned. Again, I'm glad ...

Thanks for your review! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

I don't have much up right now, because I sent them in for a contest and was asked in the rules to temporarily remove them -- but browse if you ...

Awesome, thank-you! Yeah, I was dabbling with that myself -- I wasn't sure if it had a greater impact the way it is, or if I've put them together as ...

I think everyone can feel this way ... I mean, I live in Canada, but I feel this way too. And, I have to say I'm glad for the society ...

Thanks for your help! I'm going to change some things around, but other lines are meant to be the way they are, simply because of the figurative language of it, ...

Thanks for your input! I haven't really written too many poems, so any input I get is awesome!

" The first marks are made by the fallen solider, the solider who feels neither agony, nor pain. " Magnificent! I don't think I really need to say anything about ...

Aw, thanks! I'm glad for your review, and I'll definitely look into ways that I can clean it up!

What really surprises me, is that a piece as beautiful as this doesn't get more attention. It isn't to say other "featured works" aren't good, but this is just ... ...

Update: first edits posted.

Thanks for your review, Reise!