Flux

Hi there! When I read, "Mori/ Haruhi" I was literally clicked as fast as I could, but my computer is a little laggy, so it didn't hurry enough. But I ...

Oh dear, I am overcome with jealousy. I guess I'll start with the faults to boost my ego a bit ;) The crimson liquid that kept him and all other ...

I'm not even going to bother with introductions; I'm keeping an eye on this story. Very intriguing. So I actually didn't find a lot of errors in here, but at ...

Incog, will you always be my friend? Ha. Your attempt at poetry. I can't believe I didn't see it earlier .... Well, here's my attempt at a review. Sometimes when ...

This is my story I'll write it as I please With my joys and happiness and my broken dreams The 'happiness' kind of ruins the whole rythm that was sort ...

Hallo! :) I'm Rei, and I'l be reviewing your work today! I am the wind, the trees The ground on which you stand This passage seems a bit cliché. There ...

I had wiped my mouth at least 100 times, and there was nothing on my shoes. It should be one-hundred times . I pulled a simile to my face. I ...

Hey, I really only have time to review your prologue! I'll have to get back to the first chapter later! Prologue If you’re reading this, my advice to you is ...

Hey! I'm La Reina, and I'll be reviewing your prologue today. (Don't have enough time to do chapter one, sorry!) [Dreamy Manifestations] I was your average girl[s], living.[/s] [The whole ...

Kyrstin stood against the [s]firm[/s] brick wall. The sun rained down on her as she waited for the first bell to ring. [Choose a different word for 'rained' since we're ...

“ I’m…I’m upstairs. Just, just a second.” When 'stammering' use a hyphen. Well, at least I think you should use a hyphen. Taking off her jacket she holds it up ...

HP: I don't find you very nice J: Yeah, and I don't find your face very nice. A ha! Hilarious. Herm.: Why thank you. I used frog pee conditioner today. ...

The name itself intrigued me. I began reading. I was enticed. I'm a horrible poet, so you're lucky I didn't go with my original plan to make a horrible verse ...

I will take out little parts, quote it. My adjustments are all in bold. If something it mission, I will bold a little question mark in braquets, okay? - - ...

I see this too, even I'm only thirteen. I miss those care-free days of playing on the jungle gym. :( It is sad to think that kids nowadays have turned ...