Flower~Child

Sometimes I wish you could see t h rough my eyes Watch my life flash like a busted light bulb I don't think flash looks right either. Sometimes I wish ...

I really like this, but it seems that your rhyme scheme changed in the very middle of the poem. I think that such a change was not necessary and made ...

I really like this poem. You painted pictures in my mind. I love dpressing poems, they are my utmost favorites. I didn't see the rhyme thing that they were talking ...

[quote="mackenzie"] Mother You have never seen my tears, Not how I cry, anyway I cry not of love or loss, But for the world, For the peril, The evil, Everything ...

Like Elinor above I found this to be another bland love story. I also like the imagery but that's about it. I think that you should make it a story, ...

Ok, review time haha, my name is flower and I guess you know why I'm here. I unlike the others felt no emotion in this. You hear these so much ...

Ok Flower here to review. One thing that I noticed that you kept doing was switching from past to present alot. I think that you should stick with one. I ...

I am not going to bother with the little things because they have been taken care of. I think that I like this, but I think that there should be ...

I really like this. I think that one thing you could do to make it better is at the part where is says from loss, from hear, etc....I think that ...

I think that it could have been better. It wasn't bad, but some of the words you used could have been replaced and made it sound better. I think that ...

This really confused me like Quetseli said above. The first thing that I thought about was cancer, I don't know why haha. The last line confused me to. Maybe it ...

It is supposed to be bird flies by. Haha with that let me introduce myself, I am Flower, or whatever you would like to call me is fine. It think ...

Hello my friend, I was just reading poetry and wondering, "Where is some work my silented1, and I have found it haha. Anyway I really like this. You are good ...

The first thing I thought when I looked at this was I am not reading this it's to long. Then I read some of the comment and left but came ...

Alright, I havn't been on in a while so I am a little rusty but here we go. Ok, well this really didn't jump out at me as something new ...