I see you, my heart races,
Skips a beautiful beat.
Every time you smile at me,
I hear it, hear it thump within my chest.
How do you do it?
How do you make me this way?
I suppose I let you,
But willingly.
I feel as though I may explode.
There is an emotion so deep,
Is it a two-way streak?
My mind is reeling.
Maybe it is all in my head,
I don't know.
I hope not,
I don't want it to be.
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Ok, review time haha, my name is flower and I guess you know why I'm here.
I unlike the others felt no emotion in this. You hear these so much they mean nothing. There is nothing that hasn't been said before in the poem. You need to tell a story, why do you like him, what has happened to make you feel this way? What she was getting at with the rhyme was that it seems like you tried to start it off rhyming and then just quit at the third line. I noticed this to but then saw that it wasn't supposed to rhyme. Anyway I hope I helped. If you have any questions about what I said pm me.
Keep Writing
-Flower-
I really like this. I know exactly how you feel.
Haileyanniful, it doesn't rhyme, where are you talking about?
Hello!
I enjoyed this poem very much! It was rather good, and I think that it holds a lot of depth for you. The only bad thing I have to say is at times it seemed as though you pushed the poem to ryhme.
Otherwise, great work && keep it up! Can't wait to read more of your work!
i really liked this poem espeacially how you just string the order of your emotions together
i really liked it and i think it shows real emotion which is what i believe to make a peom great
keep writing
Beautiful!! It's hard to write 'cause my cousin is messing with my hair....but i'll attempt it!! This poem is actually really ironic for me at the moment, because I just learned something of the sort!
Absolutely beautiful!
Hello jemjive! I'll be your reviewer for today!
This was really good. It really made me think about a guy I really really like. Its true, and it was an awesome poem. I can't wait to read more of your work!