Flemzo

I was definitely drawn in by the title, and if this is only the first half of the first chapter, I can't wait to read more. This opening reminds me ...

Wow. Absolutely wow. When I saw that it was 3k words, I literally groaned. But as I read it, it sucked me in. I started looking for mistakes, but then ...

First thing I noticed, right off the bat: every line that doesn't end in a period ended with a comma. The rule I learned for poetry is that it's basically ...

Maybe I would’ve managed todayb[],[/b] too , if it weren’t for the fact that I’d done the same for the past three days and this time my exhaustion finally won. ...

I like you writing style. It's pretty straightforward, which I really appreciate, and you say what you need to say without much embellishment. However, it could use a little more. ...

Six views and no reviews? Nonsense! I'm here to save the day! “C-SPAN is one unpaid electric bill away from being a radio station.” –Seth Meyers, at the 2011 White ...

Overall, pretty good. I really enjoy poetry that tells a story or provides some sort of emotional story that I can get into. And with the speaker of this poem, ...

Capuccino: one of my favorite drinks. That's partly why I chose to take this story. The other reason is that it's nearly 11pm, I can't sleep, and I haven't done ...

Hi, resident YWS Musician on board. I'm here to give your lyrics a read-through. Basically, I'm going to check for flow (making sure your rhythms match up and that sort ...

I clicked. And I was entertained. This is a great poem, and in just fiddling around on the guitar, this would make an excellent song. I especially loved how you ...

Haunting. It's the first word that popped into my head when I read this. It's very well written, and I'm kind of a fan of stream-of-consciousness writing. However, I also ...

The title is interesting. I didn't notice it when I first read the poem, so I immediately thought of this as a longing to reunite with someone. Rereading it, I ...

In trying to figure out where to begin with this critique, I was trying to find something I liked about the poem. So I'll start with this: I appreciate the ...

One word is stuck in my head each time I re-read this: "Wow." Honestly, I wish I could allow myself to get away with writing something so short and so ...

As per critique sandwich rules, I enjoy that it is short. I don't like poems that go on and on and on and say nothing. However, I also don't like ...