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Re: Council Meeting 2/19/17 Secretary's Notes
Hello! Feltrix here for a review, which I'm sure you can figure out from the bold writing above. Sorry this is so brief. This seems awfully brief for a council ...
Feb 26, 2017 -
Re: The Raven: A Five Hundred Word Story
Feltrix here for a review. I'm sure you know that from the bold writing above. I share an affection for ravens, especially intelligent, literate ravens with speech. Any who, the ...
Feb 26, 2017 -
Re: (2) Snippets from my WIP, 'Five Emerge'
Hello! Feltrix here for a review. I'm sure you've figured that out from the bold text above. "By far, the VR headset was the most comfortable she had ever worn." ...
Feb 26, 2017 -
Re: Seven horrors of the world.
Hello! I'm Feltrix, and I'm reviewing, but I'm sure you've figured that out from the label above this. Moving on, I'm writing things down as I read them, so this ...
Feb 26, 2017 -
Re: LMS: Perfect Machine 2
Hello! Feltrix reviewing! I'm writing suggestions as I read, so there will be no order to this. I'm not sure 'noblegirl' is a term. "He hung by one arm thousands ...
Feb 26, 2017 -
Re: Huntress: Chapter 1- Pack [Edited; LMS]
Hello! Feltrix reviewing! I'm writing things I think you should correct as I read, so this may seem unorganized. Because it is. There should be a space between I and ...
Feb 25, 2017 -
Re: Chapter One
Hello! Sorry this review is really short and only about one character. I feel like the doctor needs to have a more set personality. In the second paragraph, he's portrayed ...
Feb 22, 2017 -
Re: Prologue
Hello! Feltrix here for a review. Like Jimms, I was drawn here by the anti-Twilight description. A friend forced me to read Twilight once and, no offense to all you ...
Feb 21, 2017 -
Re: His Perfect Machine
Hello! When I saw the description, I thought 'Ooh! Steampunk!', so here I am. I really like how the, MC, who I assume is an inventor, thinks. I like his ...
Feb 19, 2017 -
Re: Dragon Dance
Hello! I am a fellow dragon fan, so I decided to review this. In the first paragraph, there is a lot of descriptions that I think could be told with ...
Feb 18, 2017 -
Re: Hidden Entity - 1.2 - Argument
Okay, first of all, I'm not sure how scientifically accurate you want to be, but Earth formed about 4 or 5 billion years ago, the universe formed closer to 13.7 ...
Feb 15, 2017 -
Re: Hidden Entity - 1.1 - Argument
This is going to be a very short review. Just a heads up. First of all, I was as fascinated as everyone else by the concept of the narrator being ...
Feb 15, 2017 -
Re: Voices of the Ice: Chapter 1 *revised*
This looks to be the start of a very good book. I especially like how the Wolfgang is referred to. I think that's done very well, without any actual explaining, ...
Feb 14, 2017 -
Re: Frozen Honor Chapter 1 Part 1-LMS Week 1
First of all, I'm very interested to see where this goes. I always like a good magical war, but what I really want to know in the first chapter is ...
Feb 14, 2017 -
Re: Shadowsong: Chapter 1.1
First of all, this is great. Really, truly great. The wording is so poetic and symbolic and it's wonderful. Still, there's so much that the real meaning can drown in ...
Feb 13, 2017
