FantasyWriter15

Thanks! Glad you liked it! I plan to post the next part soon, as soon as I get enough points to do that! :D

Thanks! :D Glad you liked it! I'll change that one part with the added 'be' because it really isn't meant to be there. Oops!

Thanks so much! I like this version better than the original!

Yeah, that's a typo, oppsies! Thanks for pointing it out to me! I'll change that!

Ahhh! Why did that post twice? Sorry I don't know why my computer had a freak-out.

I think that you should separate the lines when you get to a comma or semicolon, I think that it would just make it flow better, and not make it ...

I like it, but I agree with the previous review, taking out 'from' in the second stanza the second to last line just may make it flow better I think. ...

This is great, I really loved the mystery behind it all, I was all like 'whoa, why are her family members vanishing?' o.O But seriously, this was really good, and ...

Thanks for that, I know it seems a little fast. I have a small problem with that. But this is just a draft and I do take your comments and ...

Thank you, that means a lot to mean. I plan to post a new chapter soon, so look out for it!