There is good and there is evil, but the line between them can be almost impossible to find.
While there is darkness, it cannot exist without the light, and light cannot exist without darkness.
When the lines become blurred, and you don't know who you are, you have to make a choice. A choice that could hurt the people you love. A choice that in my case, can decide the fate of the universe.
In the end, all I really know is that the answers don't come easy. It's supposed to be simple. But it's not.
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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
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Ooooh, well this is prologue is hinting at some rather heavy stuff right there...wow, its definitely not holding back on any count at all there. The fate of the universe is about the largest stakes that you can get and the fact that it looks that is currently resting on the choices of this one person that I assume is the protagonist definitely makes you want to find out more there.
Those first throw lines are quite powerful there too, they definitely seem to be hinting at quite a lot despite being as short as they are, while they also manage to sounds fairly vague which does make this a pretty mysterious prologue here. Especially the line about how light doesn't work without darkness and how darkness doesn't work without light. That really seems to be talking about some kind of good and evil balance and how one doesn't exist without the other...but it is vague enough that you can't quite tell.
That last line is also a pretty interesting choice there, it almost sounds like whatever choice this person has to make in order to decide the fate of the universe is something they don't quite know how to answer...well at any rate, it has me interested. This seems like a story that I'd totally read here.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
Ouch, to have to make a choice that decides the fate of the universe would be complicated and harsh, very detailed in pro's and con's, and for someone like me, most likely disastrous for me as far as my mental state, or the world and everything else, and most likely still myself as well. Anyways good prologue.
Ouch, to have to make a choice that decides the fate of the universe would be complicated and harsh, very detailed in pro's and con's, and for someone like me, most likely disastrous for me as far as my mental state, or the world and everything else, and most likely still myself as well. Anyways good prologue.
Great work I love reading these types if stories. Interested to see how long some of these continuing stories and blogs or whatever they tend to be last. It's almost difficult to wait I see them often on here thanks for a good read.
This is really good. I love this prologue!
It keeps the plot from being obvious and overshadows with the line 'a choice that in my case, can decide the fate of the universe'. The good thing though is that it doesn't overshadow it too much, which is what you want. It's very mysterious and makes the reader want to read more
For some reason I can see this whole 'prologue' being published on the back cover of a book instead of an actual prologue. but that's just me.
I'm already hooked and it's only the prologue! hahaha
please keep writing i would love to read the first chapter xx
Thanks so much! I like this version better than the original!
This sounds very intriguing. It makes me wonder what's going to happen
"A choice that in my case, can decided the fate of the universe." - I think you need to change decided to decide, otherwise its the wrong tense
It's really good! I like it! Post the first chapter! I want to know what happens!
Yeah, that's a typo, oppsies! Thanks for pointing it out to me! I'll change that!