Falcon_Ablaze

Hi, I must say that this is a very nice piece. Just a few small suggestions. Chased by the man, face so pale. "face so pale", sounds a bit strange ...

Hey there and welcome to YWS! First off, I just wanted to say that we do have a rule that you do at least two reviews before begin posting your ...

Hi, No, I didn't fall off the face of the earth but was really close :) . I just realized that I've had this done in my room since January ...

Hiya, Okeydoky, now with the long ago promised critique : P. Me oh my, you got a lot done! I didn't read through the other critiques so sorry if I ...

Hey Briggi, *gapes in amazement* This is great! I love your concept on water. I didn't see anything off with the pattern but I'm not the best at that :wink: ...

Hi, Sorry I didn't get to these sooner. It's been a bit hectic at my house. I'll start with chapter two. After I roared, I charged the two half dragons. ...

Hi, Sorry I didn't get to this sooner. It's been a bit chaodic at my house. I'll start with chapter one. After I roared, I charged the two half dragons. ...

Hi Stupidiot92, I just browsed over this and it looks very interesting :) . I guess I'll start with with the prologue (that would make sense, right? :wink: ). Some ...

Hi, I just browsed over this and it looks good to me. It's nice to see someone interested in the environment :) . My only suggestions are: Although, it actually ...

Hey there FireArris, You've got a pretty good start here. I, as well LOVE Dragons :P ! Here are some of my suggestions: “GO KIRANIA! GO!” Tamada shouted to the ...

Hi Pawprint, Most of what I saw was minor typo's e.g. missing a space, "I" not capitalized. Also, since in your dialog your using "Mother" as a name, you should ...

Hello Jonny911, My congratulations on a well written piece. You made Anne a very real and lovable character. Underlined below are my suggestions and questions. Anne Taylor is not a ...

Hey There, It sounds good. A little choppy in places but still good. Here are a few suggestions I have: The thought of being trampled curled his fingers protectively underneath ...