FLyerS

Hey. Just so you know, I think this piece was over-reviewed. It came off as fake, like something you would see on TV. It seemed like a steriotype of every ...

Hello Darling, This is your first post, so I'll go easy on you... But after this I'll rip you apart... unless it is good, which is always a possibility. I ...

I feel like taking this piece, which was the first thing on the list, in chronological order, and placing it in first place in anti-chronilogical order. (Thus making it the ...

Why am I not a Christian? Some people would view this as an attack on you. I don't. If you want to tell me why you are a Christian, I ...

First of all, I would like to point out some discrepancies It will be my choice. followed almost immediately by What will fate choose? also: I fall into a fetal ...

Good. I liked the dual nature of the character. The line She wears bright colourful clothes to school doesn't quite jive rhythmically. Neither does And insists she prefers to blend. ...

I like this poem. This woman isn't proud of her husband's sacrifice like the government tells her to be. She is angry, and has a right to be. She accuses ...

Hey, FLyerS here. This is an oddly formatted piece. I'm not sure I liked it. The sentences were awkward. If you make the sentences formatted in different lines It makes ...

Hey, FLyerS here with your requested review. It's good to start with action to pull your reader in, but this action needs to forshadow what action is to come. If ...

Wow, you've got a lot of reviews, sure you need another one? I loved this story. It was great, but saying "I was there" at the beginning of every week ...

Sorry it took so long to review you! I haven't been online in a while. This story is very James Bond-esque. I thought It could use a little more descriptions. ...

That was weird... I don't know... somehow the syntax of the language was off... it sounded as if a British person was trying to sound American. All tough and stuff. ...

Nice rework! I still like Sluttish better than sordid, but this version is much easier more fluid. one nitpick: Perhaps loitered at, but not a big deal... Unless it was ...

hey Mean, Nice name by the way, after the Beatles song? I don't like the first line. Something about it feels off...? I LOVE the second line! Sparkle of brilliance ...

Um, I read the first chapter... wtf? very odd. Perhaps some more explaining to do? I'm confused. This chapter, however was more normal. Good thing. When telling a story about ...