Explosive_Pen

Oh my God! Haha! Welcome to YWS, and may I just say, you've come up with a killer! I mean, "I have been hard for 90 years." Talk about.... well, ...

Hi there! Grammar first, alright? You made several mistakes: The time came where This should be when, since you're talking about a specific point in time, as opposed to a ...

Hi there! Okay; I loved this. I've totally felt this way before. *Sigh* Just some nitpicks: Your charm and jokes hook every girl in the room, hook, line, and sinker. ...

Hi there! First off, the whole comma-pause thing just doesn't work. If the commas are in unecessary places, our minds will just skip over them. The "intended purpose" is in ...

Bonjour, Suzanne! Ca va? She didn’t sleep last night. If they kept her another night, she probably wouldn’t sleep tonight either. You repeat night a lot here. Also, when you ...

Hey there! First off, welcome to YWS. Comments are in bold, 'kay? Love is the spring that never runs dry, I think it'd have more of an effect if Love ...

Bonjour, Suzanne! Je suis en d'accord avec Angel of Death. J'adore ce aussi. Francais est tres belle, plus belle que anglais! :wink: All language comments aside, I did enjoy this. ...

To Kill a Mockingbird, by Harper Lee. One of the best books I've ever read, and it really focuses in on the racial issues in America during the early 1900s. ...

Emily! 'Ello! I shall critic-ify this! And this is just another stupid love song, I didn’t want to waste your time. It’s not very good or even that long, And ...

Evi, as always, your writing is lovely. I wish I had at least a fraction of the talent you do. However! I had to reread your poem a couple of ...

Hi there! The oceans were once painted gold, full of hope and wonder. What has happened to the golden seas that we all once knew? In its place is blackness; ...

You wallow around in Homework Help, Waiting for someone to give a yelp. You shake off the mud and curl your tail, Leaving behind a math-laden trail. You sweep down ...

Hi there! I'm tired and I just drank half the bottle of coca cola so this review probably won't be a very good one but I'll try my best, 'kay? ...

Hey! Welcome to YWS. So nitpicks in bold, 'kay? I no what you think It should be: "I know what you're thinking: It's gonna Should be going to. Gonna isn't ...

Amazing! You are a genius! And coffee is the best thing in the world. :D Five million gagillion gold stars! Okay, again with the punctuation issues, but that just might ...