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'Taking her eyes of her father' - 'of' should be 'off'. 'and his stuck up like he had run his hands through it multiple times' - I think you missed ...

I thought he was the Nyan cat's long-lost-incredibly-ugly father. Love it, love it, love it! Sadie said, so confused she didn't even look at Will, and I swear, Sadie is ...

'Attrociety' - did you mean 'atrocity'? 'before injecting the oxygen into vacuum.' - you missed out the 'a' between 'into' and 'vacuum'. 'wssentialy like gliding on a cushioin of air' ...

'This could be his last few breaths.' - 'This' should be 'These'. '"I killed a man once," he wheezes, "A very important man. T. Noir. He was rich, handsome and ...

So, I'm not much of a poet but I'll give this a shot. 1. I don't know if it's the anger against society, the faulty grammar, or the rhythm - ...

Hello, there. I'm not much of a poet but I'll try to give you a hand. I think this poem could do with a little more intricate formatting. For example, ...

'his proud of his long tail.' - the first 'his ' should be 'is'. 'but actually not so good hunter.' There should definitely be an 'is' between 'but' and 'actually'. ...

'I stood there shaking,breaking.' - you missed the space after the comma. 'mrs. Hutson' - This should be a capital 'M' and it's 'Hudson'. 'I'm nothing with out you.' - ...

Ow! Just so much pain! How am I supposed to even ... ? That was so cruel! I think the worst (best, as in, made me cry worst) line was ...

Hey fort, '“What’s the city like?” I asked, after we had been walking for a while.' - This was a bit of a sudden jump. I think it would flow ...

'it was quite except for the faint pitter-patter of the rain' - 'quite' should be 'quiet'. 'She didn’t care, she’d seen worse, slept in worse.' - the first comma should ...

'I groaned and looked at my alarm clock, 5:30 I read.' - the comma should be a full stop. I've just noticed that you switch tenses a lot during this. ...

Hello, I don't normally review poetry but I'll do my best. I absolutely LOVE the line: wishing to be, just be because it reminds me of a million times I've ...

February 2nd is my birthday :) 'what's to come in the following years' - 'what's' should be 'what was' because 'what's' means 'what is' which is in the wrong tense. ...

'You know how in the movies or television, when you watch scenes where someone decides to shoot the place up, it's usually in slow motion so that you can see ...