At Winter Quay,
There was no sun,
The angels struck,
Liberty won.
Hearts torn apart,
The Pond ran dry,
An orphan song,
A timelord's cry.
At Winter Quay,
We said goodbye,
The angels won,
And two loves die.
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Ouch this one just hurt. I mean right in the feels. "The angels won, as two loves die". That line was just so sad. I love the tone of this poem and the use of short words in a rhythmic voice. I am not much of a poet so I usually don't read many of these and leave reviews but this one captured that moment where all of us were most heartbroken, the end of the Ponds. All in all a really good poem. I enjoyed reading it even though it was a punchbin my fandom gut. Thank you for the read
Ow! Just so much pain! How am I supposed to even ... ? That was so cruel! I think the worst (best, as in, made me cry worst) line was
because it reminded me, rather painfully of every time the Doctor has lost someone. Donna was the most painful. Don't ever talk to me about Donna.
I'm not a poet, so I'm just going to keep talking about why this is an awesome and painful poem.
This line is not something that would be understood by a non-Whovian, which gave the poem a feeling of community.
Would you stop? Argh, that hurts. However, it does bring an interesting idea to life. The gravestones show that they lived long lives and more than that - their names were on the same gravestone. If they had continued travelling with the Doctor, I doubt they would have lived so long. I think it is the Doctor who loses them, as he loses everyone else.
Well done and pain
I'm not sure whether to start crying or to re-read and then start crying. I like the general poeticness of this piece, and this actually made me a little misty eyed when I read "The Pond ran dry". I never really thought of the episode on the terms that the angels really did win, even though they were destroyed. Thank you for this.
Hello there, and happy review day.
Jeez. It's natural for me to be crying over a poem based off of a TV show, isn't it? Because guess what your poem made me do.
While this isn't very emotional in itself, it is written about a very emotional episode, and some of your wording just brings out the feelings. Normally, "The Pond ran dry" wouldn't mean anything, but here it most certainly does. And it hurts. As you can see, I'm still not quite over Angels Take Manhattan.
Now, style-wise, I like the way this was written. It was simple, and the rhythm worked very well. It kind of reminded me of the poem from A Good Man Goes to War with the rhythm. Now, I only have one grammatical nitpick.
Time Lord should be a) two words and b) capitalized. That was all I found. Apart from that, this was very well edited. So simple yet so emotional. From one Whovian to another, this was truly (Ninth Doctor voice) fantastic. Great work! Keep it up!
Oh my gosh I have feelings :'(
That's an amazing poem. I especially liked the line "The Pond ran dry." I like the structure of the poem, and I'm glad you submitted it.
It's kind of a short poem, but I like that about it. It's like you don't really need to say anything more. You've given enough feels already.
Anyways, it's a really good poem and you should post more
OH GOD THE PONDS!!!!!!
You could give some beautiful imagery here to add to the grandiosa of the Angels take Manhattan . I mean I remember being an absolute wreck when I watched it. For example rather than saying that the angels won, you could turn it into a beautiful description which would make it so much powerful and hit me in the feels even more. 
Well hey, Retro here and I shall review whilst crying in intervals.
There aren't any major nitpicks with the piece i'd just like more
That being said it is a cute short piece. The pond ran dry//an orphan song. That part in particulier is my favourite because poor River! And the rhyme doesn't feel that overly forced which is a bonus.
Keep it up!
Here if you need me,
~Retro