ExOmelas

Once more unto the breach... Nit-picks: Wolfeman frowned at her. "He still has his mustache. I'm surprised you'd say that." Really? He's surprised she's angry and venting her frustration? I ...

Right, time to get started on review day! Nit-picks: seat at the barstool near the kitchen.Her parents missed space Ophelia smiled genuinely. How does Curi know it was genuine? ride ...

Alternatively, I decide to procrastinate from writing my own story... Nit-picks: Once she had ignored all the foreign buts that had sat on it, she merrily slept the rest of ...

Remembering that because these weren't in the green room and I wasn't getting extra points for them, I discovered I was actually in 3rd for the review rankings today, not ...

Hey again, this will probably be my last for today but I'm hoping to get up-to-date tomorrow for Review Day :) Nit-picks: What if they drug the Andrews party "dragged" ...

Another day, another review :) Nit-picks: He had psyched himself up mentally, and he couldn't let his rush of courage die down. This is a sudden switch to the POV ...

Hi again! Nit-picks: He wiped it away and t he battered knuckles on his right hand throbbed It felt like he’d awakened from a nightmare where instead of falling from ...

Hey, finally getting round to this :) I'll do nit-picks as I go through (but so far there have been very few) then go on to talk about different elements ...

Hi again, Nit-picks: Things were just going too well, of course, someone just had to mess it up. The culprit of the shenanigans stood right next to her. This hasn't ...

Hi again, sorry for the pause in reviews. Was away on holiday. Anyways, Nit-picks: This was going to be a boring night for her, wasn't it? Not that she didn't ...

Wooooot! Nit-picks: “Katrina, I think I know what went wrong.” “What was it?” This seems like an unlikely reaction. Would she not be surprised that he all of a sudden ...

Hi again, Nit-picks: Her hair was now long strands of straight hair The double "hair" here is a bit repetitive. "Her hair was now in long strands" would work. Ah, ...

Hi again, Nit-picks: near her birthday but saved enough to throw these parties. Wait this party is for her birthday? Did I miss that? If I did, apologies. There were ...

Aaaaaand back to long chapters haha! There is a medium there somewhere you know xD Nit-picks: During lunch, she asked Since you're giving a time when this happened, it makes ...

Hi there! Ooh short chapter this time - I'll be able to do more today than I thought. Nit-picks: Great. Now, I am berating myself. It seems unlikely that she ...