Evi

Uh, sorry if this sounds harsh, but this site is in fact for writers to edit each other. Support also, but that's why we have the whole 'critique' system going. ...

Why do you look out from a tainted window? Great, strong starting sentence. It makes me immeditaely wonder. Why do you wear shoes Crushing the dewy green grass (Dewy sounds ...

Hey pop! So, for some weird reason, all of the things of yours that I review aren't really reviews. They're more like me just saying that you rock epically. I ...

First of all, I looked at your reply to Rosey's critique. You really don't need to keep reminding everyone that it's not necessary to stick to rules and standards. We ...

Lavender eyes you paint the skies a shade of purple and blue. I want to find out if what we have is loving, pure, and true. This is sweet. The ...

Hey, how ya doing? I noticed that you didn't have any comments. But, seriosuly, you've got to give people more than one hour to comment on your stuff. Try, like, ...

Emily This isn't what I want to be. This isn't how I want people to see myself. (How I want people to see me .) So many negative thoughts are ...

This world of darkness, this world of hate. This isn't a sentence. No period for fragments. This world of cruelty, this world of fate. Ditto. The rhyming here sounds slightly ...

Close your eyes and brace yourself: I like the comcept of bracing yourself, instead of bracing 'it', as is much more common. Our established way of life deteriorates. Young girls ...

Hey, I'm Evi. I'm surprised nobody else has gotten to this; you're pretty famous on YWS! Th e sun is so bright that it hurts to look at the white ...

I really liked this. In fact, so much that I'm going to give it a gold star. It has that nice surprise ending; without it, the poem would be pointless. ...

Time Time is a river, Constantly on the move. Turning and gushing, Surging and rushing. I like how only the last two lines rhyme. Let's see if you can keep ...

Holy guacamole, anti-pop! Why didn't you tell me you were hilarious? :) This is truly, honestly brilliant. I love the transition between happy self and non-happy self. I could point ...

Oh, goody! I'm here to finish what I started! I loved him. But I also loved spaghetti. Dude. I died when I read this. Positively died. This. Is. So. Hilarious. ...

And, to dive straight in! “Charlotte,” called the voice. I knew that voice. His voice. (Put 'his' in italics, maybe?) At first, it was like any other voice. It's really ...