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Re: inside
Esteria, Hello! Welcome to YWS :) I hope you'll love it here. Anyway, I'm absolutely horrid at critiquing poetry, and know absolutely nothing about it, so I'll pass this review, ...
Oct 2, 2008 -
Re: childhood.
Alexis, Hello, welcome to YWS (: Hopefully you’ll love it here. Anyway, you got your fill of critiques and praise, but tiny little thing has to change. The zero I ...
Oct 1, 2008 -
Re: My Frozen Blood-Chapter One
Quibbons, Ello ^^ Quote: Robert was getting impatient, he took a last gulp of tea, which was now stone cold and looked around once more for the Doctor. Run-on. First ...
Sep 27, 2008 -
Re: Waiting for Paris to End
Bianca, Hello! How are you on this lovely, lovely evening? Quote: That’s because our rendezvous is late at night where no one else is around. “no one else” again Quote: ...
Sep 27, 2008 -
Re: The Messenger
BrokenWings, Hello! Welcome to YWS! I hope you’ll like it here (: But, before I start with your critique… You review count is zero, which means you haven’t written a ...
Sep 27, 2008 -
Re: The Swedish Effect, Chapter 1, Part 1
Elektrisk, Hello! How are you on this lovely, lovely day? I trust that well (; Anyway, to your review: Quote: This was a rather frivolous task, because he never. stops. ...
Sep 27, 2008 -
Re: Awakening
Gracee, Hello! How are you on this horribly lovely day? I hope that well (: Anyway, the line-by-line crit’s been already done, and I won’t repeat what’s already been said. ...
Sep 27, 2008 -
Re: Where it Hurts
winnie603, Hello! How’re you on this lovely, lovely day? Because, it’s a fantastic day. An awesome day. I think I’ll start singing ^^ La-la-la-laa la-la! Anyway, first thing first: Your ...
Sep 27, 2008 -
Re: Because - Chap. 1 (Edited)
KJ, So you whipped up another story, yes? Started reading as soon as I saw it, lol - that’s the effect your writing has on me. *grumbles. You’re evil like ...
Sep 27, 2008 -
Re: Novel- Prologue
Anonamuse, Hello! How are you on this lovely day? (: To your critique, though. Quote: His desire fulfilled he pulled his trousers back up as he stood; Comma after “fulfilled”. ...
Sep 26, 2008 -
Re: Soul
Ladylark, Hello! How are you? I hope that fine ^^ Anyway, to your critique: Quote: The young man beckoned to her, his dazzling grey eyes danced with excitement. Times. “dancing” ...
Sep 26, 2008 -
Re: Serendipity In Hell; 2
Sunshine, Hello! I don’t have much to say at the moment - the weather’s still good, lol - so I’ll just proceed with your critique^^ Quote: A sharp gasp escaped ...
Sep 26, 2008 -
Re: Forest People Pt. 1
Running, Hello! ‘scuse me for the username, but I’m not going to type out the whole thing, and I don’t fancy calling anyone “devil” ^^ So “running” you are. Anyway, ...
Sep 25, 2008 -
Re: The Last Dance
CJeanene, I think - actually, I’m thinking of your zero review count. Er, yeah. See, to post anything at all, you need to write at least 2 reviews for other ...
Sep 25, 2008 -
Re: Not a Life (working title)
Wessie, Hello! How are you on this ever so warm autumn day? Anyway, before I review your piece, something very important. Very, very important. The 2:1 ratio. See, before you ...
Sep 25, 2008
