Eraqio

A long read is the first thing I have to say. Second, I liked the naturalness of it all, some of it did come off as kind of clunky, like ...

Very... uninteresting. I mean, just from the opening it dumps us into this situation without any fore-ground info or action. I get that this is 'part 2' but really there ...

I dont remember Television being that deep. Anyways. The character is a little bastard. haha, sorry had to get that out of the way. He spouts quick one liners then ...

Red Jacket stalker Her piercing, deep green eyes scorned my aura. The questionable silence. Red passionate glance of etiquette. The fire and sexual intention in the contrast of her hair ...

"Breathe, Bonnie," Oh yeah, air. I let myself suck in, (hah, sorry I think some better phrasing or changing it's use) ecstasy at last. Somehow forgotten and unlikely foreign, the ...

Like a Dark version of Encyclopedia Jones. Well, I was bugged by the improper dialogue at the beginning, when the principal is announcing the death over the intercom, it felt ...

hahahahah, I effing love this! I mean, yeah it was a bit cluttered at parts but hey, you get a ruby and it will always have something stuck to it. ...

I thought the last part was still a part of it and went "WTF?" haha, but seriously... Your take on the whole roses are red thing was interesting and I ...

In my mind I saw someone talking to themselves hah. Hmm, well for one it is very, very simple, and that I liked, the flow was very straightforward with the ...

A poem that slips from calm sunset at the shore to watery doom for an unsuspecting man. Nice. other than the lacking in punctuation, the only problems are you could ...

From the very start I was lost. THe title drew me in because it was familiar, and thats not really something you want, but from what I can infer, this ...

Hmm. I like the theme, which you've probably gotten already, but the composition of it threw me for a loop. I get the insertion of the minute, commonplace things like ...

I suck at critisizm so here goes. It all read very disorganized, which for me was a side effect of the painting, everything came out jumbled and forceful yet chaotic ...

It read like a brief passage from one of the epics of the bible. that or one of the popular gorifying tales of the old knights. There was a sence ...

You focus too much on this concept of ultimate beauty. Classic romantics and victorian writers might emphasize this easily, but you beat it into the reader again and again without ...