EnchantressMuffin

This was fairly good... I liked the line, "they have bloodstained teeth", as the imagery is very good there. The rest of it, aside from that line, was... mediocre. Agreeing ...

Okay, I couldn't even read the poem because of the chatspeak and the fact that "your" was misused. In the phrase, "You're beautiful", the your is NOT possessive, it is ...

Ooh, just the title of this was enough to make me interested. And the poem did not disappoint! I love the first line. It made me smile. :D One thing, ...

Okay, this was really good. I loved the feelings, the dark nature of this. I especially loved this stanza: You think you are pretty But under all that make-up You ...

Hey! This was really good. I especially love this stanza: "the bridge across the waters wide cannot hold back the surging tides beneath the falls we sit and wait to ...

This is starting to get really great! I think this was my most favorite chapter by far; sorry it took me so long to critique it! So, I really like ...

Ooh... this was really really good. I don't think that any of the points you were unsure of were bad points. I very much liked the fact that this was ...

Mm... not a bad job on this, though your editing was pretty shoddy. Look it over as soon as you get a chance. No one really wants to read a ...

Have to make this quick, so I'll just point out the grammar mistakes. “Not if your (should be you're) asking as her ex-boyfriend!” said Liz. Ally looked at him, a ...

Mm... so I said I'd comment, and here I am, commenting. First off, I liked this. I like your characters--ah, that endearing mix of quirkiness and realness--and your storyline and ...

Overall, this struck me as one of those, "Oh poor me, I've been broken up with, what do I do" kind of stories. Now, this kind of story can be ...

Mm... this was pretty good. I liked the storyline and whatnot pretty well, and the characters are likeable. But... - Through the whole thing, I had only a vague notion ...

Well, I told you what I thought (mostly) over IM, but I'll repeat it here for the benefit of you. You lucky girl. Alrighty. The first two stanzas were okay, ...

Without the help of the title and your disclaimer, one wouldn't really know that you were talking about vampires. Overall, it was pretty good. I haven't read Twilight, so I ...

This was very wordy and didn't do a thing for me. You seem to be trying to sound very smart, and maybe you are very smart, but the way this ...