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Re: Chapter 2- Boss Vs. Beast
Hello there, EmptySoul is here to review your story! I'm just going to point out a few things that I didn't like about it, it's easier for me. First of ...
May 1, 2016 -
Re: Sad morning
Hi there, Empty Soul is here to review! I don't quite understand what you were writing. It seemed like a poorly structured poem at some parts and a short story ...
Feb 8, 2016 -
Re: Broken Glass (Chapter 1)
Hello there, EmptySoul is here to review your chapter! :) What I liked: -Your chapter is well structured most of the time -It wasn't dull at all. Your chapter didn't ...
Feb 8, 2016 -
Re: The Life of Lily ~ Short Story
Hi, there! EmptySoul is here to review your short story. :) What I liked: I adored the way you played around with the words to create images in our minds. ...
Feb 8, 2016 -
Re: Lost In Black and White---- 2
Hello, EmptySoul is here to review! :) First off, I just want to give you a few tips for your dialogue since I saw that you've been making the same ...
Oct 19, 2015 -
Re: Lost In Black and White~ Part 1
Hi, EmptySoul is here to review your story! :) What I liked: - The opening paragraph. I liked the way you started with a thing that happens to most us. ...
Oct 10, 2015 -
Re: I wonder
Hello there, EmptySoul is here to review your work! :) First off, when you wrote your dialogue, you didn't include any attributions. For example: he said, she said, etc... It ...
Oct 10, 2015 -
Re: "Promise"
Hi there! EmptySoul is here to review! Here are a few things I noticed that I think you should work on: - You might want to separate your texts in ...
Jul 20, 2015 -
Re: Solaria - Exchange
Hi there, EmptySoul here. In this review, I'll just state a few things that I didn't get or things that you should change. "I don't want to die." I stated ...
Jul 19, 2015 -
Re: Missing. (Prologue; Chapter 1)
Hi, EmptySoul here! First of all, I didn't really understand the: " **(Blone)** ". Were you changing point of views? If so, I don't think that it was necessary to ...
Jul 19, 2015 -
Re: Mute Does Not Mean Dumb- Prologue
Hello, EmptySoul here to review your story. :) Nitpicks: But I didn’t, my cries were silent, and could only be told by the tears running down my cheeks. I'm pretty ...
May 2, 2015
