Emorykings

it is a beautiful pieces I really did enjoy going through it as I read Icould feel as if I was present in that window. and the sense of joy ...

does are strong words I enjoyed the words you use, but the poem as a whole i'm not too sure about, firsty I didn't see any puntuation until about the ...

personally I have never tried to describe a club scene poetically i'm saying so because this is what I think your poem is all about and for that I must ...

Below are some adjustments capitalize She LAYS down on the floor so cold her body's WEAK and her words untold He STANDS there, like an evil shade watching her soul ...

Judging from what I just read I belive that you will do just fine, but what I will like to advice is try as much as possible to stay off ...

ehmmm that was a mouthful I really did enjoy reading that story, the suspense that was in it. but i think still that you could do more with words, because ...

Your poem was a great, maybe they didn't realize it or maybe there were greater poems there but do not let that discourage you. personally I think that you really ...

ehmmmmmmm seriously i couldnt read the whole of the poem it too too lenghty, I know for sure when I read those first stanza that you had something serious and ...

i must say I did enjoy reading this poem though it might seem a bit too deep and yet simple its not easy to express such immense feeling with words ...

ehmmmmmmm that was a piece worth dying for I have read this very piece several times trying to understand the level of feeling the writer was when writting this poem, ...

your poem contains a deeo expression of personal feelings and you did a great job in expressing them, but only that the expression was too indepth for a third person ...

it was a cool poem you wrote there. that just needs little touches, first of all in your first three stanza there was no any form of puntuation. again in ...

as babygirl12 rightly acknowledge its a great poem, that just needs little adjusting for it to be perfect. firstly i would emplore you to do some thing about your formatting, ...

wow thats cool you did a great stuff there, though i dont know if your formatting is accapted in poetry, I liked it. but i would like to add that ...

I see you really took time to work on this pieces, your constructive english, rhythm and imagery was cool. But what i think you really did not pay attention to ...