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Re: My Kind of Rebellion
Hey there, teamie :mrgreen: So I notice this had no reviews :shock: No idea why - it's a brilliant piece. Like most of your pieces actually. :P Wonderful, wonderful stuff. ...
Jul 29, 2009 -
Re: Organ Eater
Have you, by any chance, read any books by Karin Slaughter? Can't remember the name of the book but it involves someone's organs being raped. Actually, I didn't finish it ...
Jul 28, 2009 -
Re: Books, and why we dislike the films!
Don't read the book anywhere near the time the film is due out. I hadn't read the HP book in years (that's why I thought it was the last film ...
Jul 28, 2009 -
Re: Round Like The Moon (6)
Hey there! So, so, so sorry it's taken me so long to review - have been on holiday ^^ **I started this review yesterday, but didn't get time to finish ...
Jul 26, 2009 -
Re: Violent father and mother
Hey there! Hmm, this is a little short for a first chapter. First chapters are not only used to hook the reader, but also to give an idea of the ...
Jul 13, 2009 -
Re: Round Like The Moon (5)
The funniest chapter yet :smt081 LOVED IT. Seriously, you made me actually laugh out loud so many times. My dog was looking at me like I was nuts. Dang, someone's ...
Jul 11, 2009 -
Re: A Cold Moon [Chapter One] [Part I]
Following up on Karsten's comments... Okay, auditorium, do you mean the "main hall" or just cut down to "hall" Registration would be a little too formal for every-day school girl ...
Jul 11, 2009 -
Re: Luna 1
Hey there! Thanks for the PM! :D First thing I noticed: Speech tags. It doesn't end with the dialogue. Like... “Finally.” I croaked. Should be: "Finally , " I croaked. ...
Jul 9, 2009 -
Re: The Day I Didn't Get Attacked
:D Hey there! I'm your reviewer for this fine afternoon! We walked in to the school with our fingers twined together. this was the first time i had gone into ...
Jul 3, 2009 -
Re: Round Like The Moon (4)
but then I started hearing noises: babies crying and even that little vacuum they use to get the baby out. Maybe describe the noise of the vacuum. Is it a ...
Jul 1, 2009 -
Re: All Mine Chp. 2
Uh oh. I'm in a nit-picky mood. I apologise in advance. ...adverse to mingling with humans but I’m more fond of parties... Comma before the "but" to break up your ...
Jun 26, 2009 -
Re: Round Like The Moon (3)
Heya :D thanks for the PM. I also have my younger little brother Tommy who’s helping out too. I don't think you need the little. Unless he's a midget or ...
Jun 26, 2009 -
Re: Thunderbolts and Lightning
One thing: You started the first two paragraphs with nearly the same thing. You love, you love... Rephrase one of them and you will certainly have a perfect story. Now ...
Jun 22, 2009 -
Re: Unknown
Wow. I loved this one. It was great. Only, I didn't like the beginning as much as the rest of it. Another thing I really like is how you keep ...
Jun 21, 2009 -
Re: All Mine 1.2
This was great it really caught my eye and made me want to read on. I know the topic of vampires is overdone, but you've somehow made it original with ...
Jun 21, 2009
