Emerson

Eh. Gosh, I can't believe I'm doing this... really, Looby-lou, please for give me greatly for what I am about to do because I feel bad enough as it is. ...

Well I guess I'm happy I creeped everyone out...That seems to be the overall impression. Thanks for the critiques! I'm going to work on giving it another ten lines and ...

About the hands thing: I get it now, but you should probably make that idea more obvious. Because it just seemed....weird. Part 2: Scall breathed at him I don't like ...

It was good, well written. My only complaint is it felt like it got a little too preachy.

the only part that made sense was the first stanza. You think what you see, doesn't make sense. And I see what I feel? No, not that either. Though I ...

Getting rid of aforementioned limitations, I think it'll turn into something better. Throw out word count! Throw out a need for moral! Good luck, I'll be looking forward to it.

Cleaned up as requested! Merci Beaucoup for the nice edits made :-D It might be lengthened later, but for now I'll leave it as is. I'm much too tired to ...

I liked how is started and ended on the same line. My only suggestion is add some more punctuation, I'm big on punctuation in poetry because otherwise I don't know ...

Back for a third round. But first: Good luck at the workshop, that will certainly help you. The language thing: You can want your character to seem extraordinary and intelligent, ...

I'm back to actually critique! Your antique dealer sounds beautiful, but you describe him in a way that pauses the action, and it happens so quickly. You have to gracefully ...

The above critiques have been taken into consideration and I've just changed it to the edited version :-) I upped the rating to PG-13 which may not be needed now, ...

I think the addition of one word could do the trick: (added word in bold) sorrow is something you learn to live with. Just like your fingers, your teeth your ...

Thanks! And, You are right, it reads better the way you gave it, but that is seven syllables, and It needs to be eight. Maybe I'll take a look at ...

Thanks everyone! I don't think I ever said that. I edited what Bubs mentioned (I'm going to call you bubs from now on). And I noticed the I thing RR ...

I edited to fit most of the above spoken needs :-) Or not...