Published January 1, 2007
No,
I don't know what happens exactly if I mix this and this together,
But I know no one's tried it, and no ones found a cure for cancer. This might be it.
Can't hurt to try.
No,
I don't know how many carbon atoms there are exactly in fossil fuels,
But I know that theres not enough to last my generation through our eighties.
That's what matters.
No,
I don't know how many watts of electricity the average household uses,
But I know it could be cut down a lot with just a little tiny bit of effort from people,
That's the big picture.
No,
I don't know the heart rate per minute of the Great Panda,
But I know it will be nothing at all if we don't stop destroying it's environment,
Thats more important.
Yes,
I do know not many people care about these issues,
But I know soon it will directly affect them, and then they will have to care .
Can't hurt to try.
That's what matters.
That's the big picture.
That's more important.
"It will never happen to me." It will.
"That's just horrible." Do something.
"It's not my fault." Not part of the solution, part of the problem.
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*applause* That was very good, I really enjoyed reading it. Maybe a tad bit repetitive towards the end, but all in all an exellent poem.
Im sorry that i dont know the details... maybe it comes across in the poem that i am ACTUALLY really bad at science...
It was good. I agree it seems a little too preachy (and knowledge of facts and details often is important if you seriously want to affect the big picture, but that's beside the point...)
And there are a few small spelling issues, particularly missing or misused apostrophes... (I've corrected them in red)
Though, I liked the pattern you've used in this poem, and how you ended it.
soz its not meant to be preachy!
x frm lucy
It was good, well written.
My only complaint is it felt like it got a little too preachy.
That was nice.Frankly speaking I started liking the poem from the second stanza.It was a bit funny too.
Good job.
Is that really the last stanza?I thought this is also included
Keep writing and posting.
ah, I see we think alike! I loved it! I've been trying to write a poem to this affect for months. Very good job.
One little crit. The last stanza,
that's what matters,
That's more important,
That's the big picture,
seemed too repetitive. I would stick with just "that's the big picture," but that's just me. Brava!