Emerson

Wow. I really wish I could be of more help but all I can think to say is, "Wow". Though, I do think I might know of something you could ...

It was very good, and the only thing I can really say is to add the proper punctuation, and to possibly pull the idea more tightly together. It is good, ...

Eh. I suppose I don't like it because it is a political poem. Not to mention, you've already blocked out any republican readers out there. Everyone understands that Hussein was ...

I think this is a very good poem! The only thing I could suggest is to go through and try to make your words stronger. For explain "pain" is an ...

The rhyming was good, but my largest problem with it was that I'm not even entirely sure what you were writing about... It's kind of vague, telling, but not direct. ...

I actually think it is rather powerful, up until the end. The end is a bit more weak and abstract than is fit. Some things like "caress my soul" are ...

*squeal* I'm not sure if I liked this because I knew the emotional back story to it, or because it was just that good or some mix of the two. ...

You might want to add some note that this is How You Break My Heart 2 (it is... isn't it?) Or if it is an edited version put (edit) at ...

Hah, well, finally saw this thread up! Hello JC ^_~ I've read the first book, and from what I recall I liked it a lot, but not enough to continue ...

I don't believe she committed suicide soon after it was written, but I don't know exact dates... though, she did kill herself. I believe she was bipolar. It's an excellent ...

I liked it, but then I'm not entirely sure what it was about. It was too long though, for me, I felt like the idea and meaning were dragged out. ...

Really, that seems more like a novel synopsis than a story. First of, you have two lists. They aren't even in paragraph form, they are lists. Lists are bad! They're ...

Heh, Pros (Ivan? Oo) liked it. ^_~ That's a good sign. And I liked it too! The only thing I can really suggest is that he punctuates it, that would ...

Well, since this is your first post, welcome to YWS! I'm just going to run some rules by you. ^_~ 3. Members are asked to withold on submitting work until ...

A sick minded murderer, A cold hearted man, to take a girl's life to prove that he can. I would change the last line to "just because he can." It ...