Emerson

This isn't so bad... I don't tend to read song lyrics. They're so... randomly strewn together that I can't get a good critique out of them, but I think this ...

I have to say, for your "first poem" I think this is very good. I just have some suggestions and questions. ^_^ Suggestions: punctuation, darling, punctuation! It's a very important ...

I suppose that it would be a good poem to give to someone as a gift, and they would find it sweet, but as a poem to share with many ...

I thought it was interesting, although I can't really expand on that. XD It's a good topic, but I think you could do more with it. As it is, you're ...

Dzen dobry, moja Melja I'm rather tied on the this, darling. I see Brad's side entirely, and then I see the poem, and it's trying really hard to be a ...

I'd follow Amelia's words... She's a smart one. :) I don't have a whole lot to say on this for the moment. I would try to come up with something ...

He was much clumsier [s]then[/s] than his companion The destination was a large brick block with large arch top windows on the first floor. The double usage of large doesn't ...

Ah, Dreamy likes CWC? I'm not too fond of it... Though, this was good. I think I would urge you to use a slight bit more punctuation. Keep in mind ...

Howdy Fish! A rather slender man stands at the bow, watching. A breeze comes, and the man smiles broadly, closing his eyes, and greedily inhaling the aroma of seawater. The ...

I'm not sure what I think about this. On one hand I like the combination of love and equations, on the other I don't think it was properly executed. Your ...

I'm not much on werewolves, but I really enjoyed this! It's incredebly unique, and I loved how it was only his mother kissing him, that worked out nicely. I don't ...

*moved to Other Poetry* Welcome to YWS ^_~ Don't worry about posting things in the wrong place, just PM me or someone else in dark green and we can move ...

I'm not sure what to say on it as is -- it is incredebly short. I'm also not sure whether I am meant to edit the "introduction" but I will, ...

I love how it holds the boredom and emptiness of fall.... even though it is a beautiful season. It's good, but it's parts seem poorly put together. You start with ...

I would cut out the last line. I don't think it really stayed true to the whole meaning of the poem, and was just kind of an add in. *shrugs* ...