" () " are screaming parts which is basically teh bridge. Hope you like it 
cause it's kind of what I feel right now to a friend.
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I admit I'm your biggest mistake.
Push me off the edge.
I fall to your face.
I don't know how to say sorry.
When I can't take the blame.
I told you the truth, but you're still playing this game.
Show me why I am so guilty?
Cause I can't feel the pain.
Why are you so angry?
When you know I didn't do anything.
Please tell me now cause I'm losing all my pateince.
What is there to blame.
When you lost to my witness.
We both did something wrong.
So just show your share.
Stop saying I'm a liar.
Cause we're not getting anywhere.
This battle must be settled.
We're dying every second.
How do I say sorry when I don't know what I've done?
Show me why I am so guilty?
Cause I can't feel the pain.
Why are you so angry?
When you know I didn't do anything.
Please tell me now cause I'm losing all my pateince.
What is there to blame.
When you lost to my witness.
Show me why I am so guilty?
Cause I can't feel the pain.
Why are you so angry?
When you know I didn't do anything.
Please tell me now cause I'm losing all my pateince.
What is there to blame.
When you lost to my witness.
(Tell me why am I so guilty!)
(Show me what I've done!)
(I can't feel the pain!)
(I'm sorry for what I've done!)
(Tell me everything!)
(Spill your guts cause I don't have anymore to spill!)
(Turn agasnt me once again!)
(Show me what I've done!)
Can you start the pain?
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Thank you.
P•S•- Sorry for the lame-o review, but I should be doing homework and well, I couldn't see anything else wrong with it! --That's a good thing--
I just like to say 'Spill your guts" for some reason I know it is a little bit silly but I like it. And what I meant by "We both did something wrong" I know I should of added "I'm still trying to find out what I've done, but just show your share"
This isn't so bad... I don't tend to read song lyrics. They're so... randomly strewn together that I can't get a good critique out of them, but I think this one I can. ^_^
This doesn't really make sense to me... lost to my witness? What do you mean? I have no idea.
This is really contradictory. At the beginning you say "we both did something wrong" then you said "I don't know what I've done"--well how do you not know what you have done if you can admit you've done something wrong?
This line is just... I laughed really hard. It's incredebly ridiculous. I'm sorry--it just is. The visuals resulting from it are not something you want; I think the slang term of "spill your guts" just doesn't work when followed by that...