Emerson

You might want to change your style, it's set up a bit strange: (Laura stands up) Laura: “Want anything Viv?” (Vivian glares at Laura) Vivian: “Mom, you know I don‘t ...

This is incredebly weird... the plot goes way to fast, and it is all dialogue. Also, there isn't really any conflict except... he kills the woman. And that doesn't really ...

I fixed the capitalization of your subject title.... This seems kind of pointless... in a way it reminds me of The Tide rises, the Tide Falls by Longfellow, although that ...

Please do not comment on your own work, or bump it. If you would like reviews, try reviewing other peoples work. Also, people with purple screen names are instructors, try ...

Hey Alice! Jack pulled the black velvet heart shaped box out of his pocket and looked at it. Did he have the guts to ask her? He hoped so. Would ...

I may not understand what you are meaning to say but upon looking hard I think that I do. Is this about alcoholics who drink themselves to near death? You ...

nervously watching the big hand of the clock at the front of the room swing in spirals. I think "swing" isn't a good verb... "big hands" of clocks don't tend ...

I like it, but I don't like it. I want it to have some grand meaning, and perhaps it does, but I'm not sure I can even see it. Of ...

This is more like a practice piece, just a random story written... you can't really call it a short story or anything, you know? Not even flash fiction. It has ...

I liked this but.. I would have liked it more had I knew the words that pertained to government and their meaning... I didn't pay attention in government class, and ...

This is an interesting idea, in fact I really loved the ending, and the idea of the flower, but I think you compressed it and did too much telling. The ...

I upped the rating to PG because of content... It's good of you to trying and write about something like this to serve as a kind of warning or a ...

Jamie called me over to his computer every twenty minutes to look at different Chinese dictionary. should dictionary be plural? Well.. I enjoyed this a lot. It has succeeded in ...

He looks one way, she another and then their gazes meet while the world slows down for them though people still rush past in ignorance. [This line irritates me, because ...

Abstract poetry is such a bizarre thing because... I don't tend to like it. XD I prefer the concrete, and something that will invoke emotion... This was beautiful though, I ...