Emerson

I agree with Snoink. ^_^ For example: As like, is like a scar. I have no idea what that is saying...? And the last stanza is incredebly jumbled. I'd say ...

Strictly chridtian rocker, did you mean Christian? Also, be sure to capitalize the pronoun I, and read over your poem before you post it. Most typos can be caught with ...

by men on horses I don't understand the idea of men on horses...Why are they on horses? I think I'm just missing the link. ......grow nearer. I don't like the ...

the blooming flowers of sparks I love this imagery. Hell, he should've been an actor. The hate emanating from the bonfire and the students and the speakers sitting quietly in ...

This is almost like a writing activity, isn't it? Oh well, I'll critique the poem anyway. This style of poetry is... wow. Honestly, it should be killed and never allowed ...

I don't know what I think... I think you have a lot of asides, and that "back there" is too vague, and that I'm not sure what to make of ...

Mrs. Tammy Johnson had gotten the idea from a magazine in 1953. 'had gotten' sounds so incredebly ugly to me. But do with it what you want, haha, I just ...

I'm not going to have a lot to say about this, and just so you know, that isn't a bad thing. ^_~ I read through this once, then read through ...

I'm not sure what I think of this. It manages to sweep right over the possibility to be something deeper than what it is, But where will my seed grow? ...

I have to second Kylan and Whence. Although, I understand it. I just don't know what it is about. Where is the deeper meaning? What is this trying to tell ...

I can only second Crysi... along with fixing the line breaks (double spacing and lengthening) keep in mind that punctuation is your friend! Again, I can only second Crysi, which ...

A Modly Note: Take it as a side note to my critique, if you will. Yelling at people because they put their time into critiquing something for you isn't nice. ...

Los Angeles, California The man hefted the toolbox impatiently as he made his way down the management office hallway of the [s]Los Angeles[/s] airport. Either introduce the setting through the ...

Hmmm... I would either put this into verse, or move it to the fiction section. (If you want it moved, I will move it for you. ^_^) Poetry is always ...

This reminded me of a poem by Bryant... The Yellow Violet , I think it was? You might want to look for it. ^_^ I like that you have a ...