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Cade has it in a nutshell. All that's really left to add is, there's more to poetry than just getting bored and deciding to write some If you're really interested in beginning to write poetry I would second Suzanne's suggestion and recommend you go and read a few volumes *tacks e. e. cummings, Emily Dickinson, Wordsworth and William Blake onto the list* and then read some books about writing poetry, because as it stands you seem (no offense) to have little grasp of the genre.

Cheers,
~bubbles

*tacks Whitman and Frost onto Suzanne's list of poets*

I think that you could justify this being in the poetry section--there is, after all, prose poetry. But this as a whole just falls flat on its face.

You have this idea, but where are you taking it? The first line sounds interesting, but the rest of the piece just falls into rambling, abstract nonsense. We, the readers, have no idea what you're talking about. This could potentially work as an angry performance poem, but here it doesn't amount to much.

Also, proper spelling, punctuation, grammar, etc. should be used.

-Colleen

Hmmm... I would either put this into verse, or move it to the fiction section. (If you want it moved, I will move it for you. ^_^)

Poetry is always in verse form. You may also want to spell check this, and read over it before posting so you catch errors... If you do consider taking up poetry, keep in mind it is much more about the reader, and what you make them feel, rather than about ranting about your own problems. Poetry is a good way to get emotions out, but if you are using poetry to heal yourself, that usually isn't good poetry for others to read, if you understand what I mean.

Also, if you want to take up poetry, read poetry. It's the best way to learn. Longfellow, Bryant, Wilde, Keats, I can't really think of anyone else right... I don't have my books with me. Sorry! That is a poor list of poets.