Published December 16, 2007
He's the great big leather bear hug.
He sends shivers up my spine.
Strictly chridtian rocker,
Makes me so nervous every time
He has a golden baby mustache,
some acne and his curls.
I thought i really liked him
But he's like all the other guys in this world
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Also, be sure to capitalize the pronoun I, and read over your poem before you post it. Most typos can be caught with a quick read over.
I can't say much on this. It was really navel gazing, and doesn't do much of anything for your reader. Poetry isn't about the writer, or in any case, the narrator of the poem... usually. You can pull off writing a poem about yourself, but you have to be really good to do so. In most cases you have to write a poem that makes your reader feel something or think something. You want to give something to your reader.
I suggest you read poetry, spend a few weeks flipping through some poetry books or reading online. The best way to learn how to write poetry is to read poetry. It will show you what poetry really is.